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BEC商務(wù)英語初級(jí)考試：書信寫作模擬題
You are going to spend holidays in Hawaii in June. Suddenly you received a letter from an important customer,Mr. Elton Deland,who will arrive on 25th June and discuss the claim. You have to delay the trip till July.
Write a short message to Ms. Anne Folster, your secretary.
. Explain Why you postpone your trip.
. Mention the date when Mr. Elton Deland will arrive.
. Ask her to arrange your meeting.
. Write 30-40words on your Answer Sheet.
提示：
一般不用信頭稱呼的形式，也不采用在結(jié)尾處署上寫信人的名字的方式，而是在備忘錄的開頭處寫明收信人To________，在結(jié)尾處寫明具體的寫信人From___________以及主題：Re：__________ 或Subject：____________。例如：
To: Head Office staff
From: Tom Beck
I have the pleasure of announcing that Ms Sally Jolie has been appointed as the new Sales Manager at Head Office. Ms Jolie is due to join us on Monday 15th. Please give her a friendly welcome when she starts work.
Thank you.
參考答案：
To : Ms. Anne Folster
From:
I have to delay my trip to Hawaii till July,as Mr. Flton Deland will arrive in London on 25th June and discuss the claim face to face. Please arrange our meeting on 26th June.
PART ONE
You have been informed that next Wednesday your company's computer system will be closed down so that improvements can be made.
Write an email to all staff in your department:
a.saying what time on Wednesday the system will be closed down
b.suggesting how staff should prepare for this
c.saying how the system will be better after the improvements
Write 40--50 words
學(xué)生作文：
From: Jenny Xu
To: All Staff
Date: 5 April 2009
Subject: Computer System
I want to tell you that our Intranet based on Linux will be closed next Wednesday at 10 o'clock.. I want to suggesting that you should save all your important documents. The computer system will be faster because we will use a newer SAP system. The new system is according to ISO900 and we will benefit from that.
作文解析：
BEC作文解答時(shí)，審題非常重要。題目中給出的要求就好比是解代數(shù)題中已知條件，都要用到。小作文處理的時(shí)候，大家不妨可以把每一個(gè)已知條件擴(kuò)寫成一句句子，同時(shí)兼顧句子之間的連接。
通常學(xué)生犯的錯(cuò)誤是：
1. 漏掉題中給出的已知條件。
2. 給出的已知條件沒有表達(dá)清楚，用詞過于口語化，沒有條理，暴露出語言功底薄弱。
3. 切忌過于花哨的發(fā)揮，多說多錯(cuò)。
這篇學(xué)生的作品是比較典型的案例。作者有一定的英語表達(dá)能力和工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)，但文章中所暴露出來的不足也是明顯的。寫作不能從細(xì)處下筆，而是先要搭建框架。
以這篇習(xí)文為例，作者在具體語言的表達(dá)的雕琢上可圈可點(diǎn)，比如說第一個(gè)句子中based on引導(dǎo)的過去分詞做后置定語，但是顯而忘記了這篇文章的主要目的，那就是通知同事公司電腦系統(tǒng)要升級(jí)，但update這個(gè)詞始終沒有在文章中出現(xiàn)，因此讀下來以后，可能同事還不是非常清楚，為什么computer system will be closed down, 盡管后面提到了improvement，總讓人覺得有些如鯁在咽，言之不盡;因此，思路不清晰是這篇習(xí)文最大的問題。
此外，本文還有以下一些問題：
1. 有些用詞過于口語化，比如說，文章開頭, I want to tell you, 文中you should save這樣的用語;
2. 建議Linux, 將SAP, ISO900等唬人術(shù)語統(tǒng)統(tǒng)除去，誠(chéng)然BEC涉及到基本的商務(wù)知識(shí)，但是真正考核的還是語言功底，語用能力;商務(wù)知識(shí)好比是蓋澆飯里面的小炒而已。
3.里面還有一個(gè)明顯的語法錯(cuò)誤，I want to suggesting….，當(dāng)然閱卷者不會(huì)刻意去搜尋語法錯(cuò)誤，而是綜合考量語法得分，但由于小作文篇幅較短，那么這個(gè)錯(cuò)誤就顯得非常明顯。
范文：
Please be informed that our computer system will be closed next Wednesday at 12 o'clock for system upgrade. The closure will last for at least two hours. Make sure that you have saved all your documents before that time. The whole system will run on a new server, much faster than the current one.
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